Introduction for essay (subjected to frequent changes) :-
Over the past few years several organizations have surveyed many parts of the world trying to estimate the number of people not having home. The renowned United Nations Commission on Human Rights came up with the a figure of estimate 100 million in 2005, taking into account only the physical attributes. Do the rest of the world population really enjoy the home only as a place to be able to return too during their complete life span? The ideas below would complicate the concept of the home by adding to it the transient nature of life as well as emotions and dwell upon the idea of 'need to define home'.
Over the past few years several organizations have surveyed many parts of the world trying to estimate the number of people not having home. The renowned United Nations Commission on Human Rights came up with the a figure of estimate 100 million in 2005, taking into account only the physical attributes. Do the rest of the world population really enjoy the home only as a place to be able to return too during their complete life span? The ideas below would complicate the concept of the home by adding to it the transient nature of life as well as emotions and dwell upon the idea of 'need to define home'.
Avoid using the same word (many) multiple times in the same sentence. Perhaps one or two more sentences of "they say" would be helpful. Is the sentence "Do the rest..." a question? Do you need a question mark? Be more clear about what you mean by "The ideas here..." The last sentence should be reworked for clarity.
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